Step 1

Information that commonly needs a decision

  • Age, cause of death, place of death, occupations, military service, faith, clubs, and photographs are optional unless a publication requires them.
  • Ask how the family wants living and predeceased relationships listed.
  • Decide whether the home address should remain private.
Step 2

Privacy and security

  • Do not publish unannounced service or travel details without family approval.
  • Avoid information that could create identity or property-security risks.
  • Use the funeral home or a trusted contact for public service information when appropriate.
Use & adapt

Examples and templates

Editorial check: “Is this detail true, necessary, approved, and safe to publish?”

Final check

Before you send it

  • Is every personal claim true?
  • Does the message center the bereaved person rather than your discomfort?
  • Have you avoided explaining the death or prescribing an emotion?
  • If you offered help, can you realistically do it?
  • Could any private detail become public if the card is shown to family members?
Editorial test

Edit Obituary Etiquette: What to Include, Omit & Verify in four passes

Truth

Verify names, dates, relationships, organizations and stories. A polished sentence cannot compensate for a wrong fact.

Burden

Choose a clear purpose and cut material that belongs in a private family conversation rather than a public tribute.

Voice

Prefer concrete scenes and recognizable details over a long list of adjectives.

Privacy

Consider living relatives, family disagreement and the permanence of public or recorded words.

Format check

Make the wording fit where it will be used

Spoken tribute

Write for breath, pauses and listeners rather than for the page.

Published obituary

Separate verified facts from interpretation and check the final publication proof.

Celebration speech

Choose a small number of stories that reveal character.

Family review

Have another person check names, relationships and anything potentially sensitive.

Practical answers

Questions about this writing task

Do I have to cover the whole life?

No. A focused portrait is usually stronger than a complete chronology.

Can I include difficult parts of the relationship?

Yes carefully when pretending perfection would be false, but protect living people and the purpose of the public occasion.

How do I choose stories?

Choose moments that reveal character, are understandable without long setup, and are safe to tell in the intended setting.

Evidence & editorial method

Editorial references

These organizations inform the general support principles on this page. The message examples and templates on this site are independently written; external guidance is summarized, not reproduced.

A source can support a general principle without determining what is right for every family, culture, faith, relationship, or circumstance.

Format-specific edit

What matters most when writing sympathy writing

The main constraint here is relationship, privacy, and the amount of attention the recipient has for reading. Treat that as part of the writing problem, not an afterthought.

  • Verify names and any factual details.
  • During the second draft, cut repeated sympathy phrases and keep one clear reason for writing.
  • Read the finished version once from the recipient’s point of view: does it ask them to explain, organize, comfort, host, or reply when they may not have capacity?
  • If a detail would feel uncomfortable on a screenshot, noticeboard, printed program, or forwarded email, move it to a more private channel.